Equine

Watching him move like
Water with the grace of
An angel flying
Across the bare ground

His neck crests with a
Smooth refinement that
Defines his elegant
Head of sweet beauty

Hooves flicker accented
By white socks stretching
To his knees moving
Weightlessly through space

How I love to ride
This equine of mine



this was written for a sonnet competion, tell me what you think!

I like it a lot. I think your words create good imagery. good flow too. excellent all around. im not poetry expert, but its stellar.

I like it. I can see your horse in movement. And seeing a horse gallop is beautiful in my opinion.

nice poem, how do you say this word? "Equine"

Wow. That's amazing. O_O

Once I got my mind in the right direction, (>_>)I had a mental picture with every word you used, as if I was right there with you. This is amazing, Yuki. I'm so impressed.


@Random:

I think you would pronounce it "ee kwine". Wine as in what you drink.

aww... thanks, as i said before, i'm entering this in a contest, and i haven't written a sonnet in over a year >.< still need to get it checked over by an english teacher though....

Just saw this.. I really like the imagery in this poem.. very nice!
Hmmm.. I believe the sonnet employs certain rhyme schemes? You might want to try that..